Partly due to my move, partly due to the fact that I have only written about 500 words in my story.
I like sharing snippets, but I don't have many to share. It is going somewhere, the ideas have arrived, and the world is forming.
I was freaking out a bit at first because it wasn't unfolding like my Beauty&Beast retelling. None of the character's were formed and it seemed generic, boring even.
No worries, it somehow fixed itself with a mix of coffee and prayer.
I now have a tentative outline in my mind ( I have a mind palace guys, it's safe)
Mostly.
So, my entry is different and honestly I didn't like it at first. It was the only idea I had so I went with it. You can find a synopsis here Show and Tell
Along with a lot of other entrants stories and synopsis. Check them out!
My story, 'Kiss My Eyes' is about a 14 year old girl who has cancer and is facing an operation. The story itself is her fantasy world she creates. A tale that mirrors her own life.
There is a bit of gender bending, and a diverse cast of characters including an ogre boy, goblins, crazed fairies and a one very obstinate princess.
Here is one snippet.
"Rachel!"
I ignore the call from
Aden, my assumed friend. The assumption was his.
"Are you there?" I can tell by his tone that he
has no intention of leaving.At least until he is rewarded with a response.
Which I am hesitant to give to the Jackanapes.
"No." I call back, "Go away."
"Ah, ha so you are there, Oh sullen princess." I
hear scraping, he is probably attempting to climb the wall again.
I pull myself off my bed where I had been sulking, "Not
sullen, imprisoned and cursed." I shout back.
His untrimmed head appears at my window, "Well than I shall have to break your
curse with a kiss." He straddles the sill, and pursues his lips at me. His
exaggerated motions sent him over the sill and onto the floor.
"Only a Prince's kiss will do, dolt." I spat,
throwing my hair back saucily.- Kiss My Eyes
Oh, its cute!!!! I love the title too.
ReplyDeleteThanks, I'm glad you think so. :)
DeleteThis sounds fascinating!! I would love to beta! Pick me! :D
ReplyDeleteI hope it comes together well. I like the sound of the cast and Aden sounds hilarious! Also, I like how it's like a parallel world; those are always so awesome!
Thanks Ashely, I pick you. :D
ReplyDeleteYou and me both. Aden is my favorite, he made me want to write it
I'm glad you like it, I am trying to make it work. Fingers crossed.
P. S. -- I tagged you for a, uh, tag (what else? XD). It's the #WritersLife tag.
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I love this! It sounds so creative and fun! I would LOVE to be a beta reader. I really hope you win (-:
ReplyDeleteThanks! :D I am so happy that you want to read it.
DeleteDawww, that is so nice of you to say.
<3
Innnnteresting! I'm glad you're writing more of it and that you have an idea of where it's going to go now! :D
ReplyDeleteThanks, me too I was really worried about it.
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Oh, this sounds very intriguing! :) I'd totally Beta-read for you, if you are still looking for people! Just lemme know... <3
ReplyDeleteThank you, That's great, most definitely. I like to get as many people as I can.
DeleteSure thing <3
Your story description is so interesting, and that snippet was adorable! I am so curious about your story now, and I would love to beta read for you if you would like! :P
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! :D
DeleteThat's great I will add you to the list.
Your mind palace seems very interesting. Mine is just a desk that has way too much information piled on top of it. It takes me hours to find something. XD
ReplyDelete"Kiss My Eyes" sounds like such a wonderful story! The synopsis sounds great and something I'd love to read, but I am absolutely swamped with my classes and wouldn't give great feedback other than very loud Internet fangirl squeals anyway. I utterly adore that last snippet, SO ADORABLE.
One question though, I'm kinda confused on the genre of your story. Is it a fantasy or contemporary? Or a mix of both?
Mine tends to misplace a lot of information as well. I'm lucky if I remember anything.
DeleteThanks! I'm glad you want to read it, I completely understand life can be crazy. I adore fangirl squealing, it's the best. :D That makes my day thanks.
It's both I guess because parts are fantasy and parts are contemporary.
I feel like a mix of coffee and prayer will fix most things. :P
ReplyDeleteLoved the snippet! Your writing never fails to make me smile.
It does,
DeleteOmigoodness, thanks for saying that :D
HOW DID I FORGET TO COMMENT. I was SURE I commented on this post! >.<
ReplyDeleteWell, here I am now. Love the banter! (I always love banter.) They seem rather opposite, which makes for great character conflict. ;)
"Oh sullen princess." XD
I'd love to beta, I just can't promise timely responses. Hours are increasing at work to almost full-time over winter. But do send it my way and I'll see what I can do!
Aww :) it happens.
DeleteThank you, I love writing banter, they are so opposite.
:D She is so very sullen.
Awesome, and no worries my responses to yours was anything but timely. You just taking time to read it makes me happy. I understand work, can be overwhelming. Thanks! I will add you to the list, I am going to send out the first chapter as soon as I edit it, Which probably won't be for a bit yet.
LOOOOOOVE the snippet!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Jack! <3
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